Tuesday, January 03, 2006

Slow..

She burns, I emulate similar lust
  we stay seperated
clouds of new year
  slither over one another
slow, slow she likes, as I
  she simulates
testing preseverance
  puerile and jejune
instincts die
  but physically reveals
fog clears, real slow,
  she gasps, her adultry surfaces,
with barren lands, leaving colossal skies
  glory of bewitching sun..

13 comments:

senthil natarajan said...

u wrote it??

Vidhu Venkat said...

@ Φ: Sensual as usual! Luks like love bug has bitten u hard...and still has its fang on u Lol!

@ senthil: woi is it so hard to believe??

PNA said...

that sounds so good .....
i envy u fi....

Ash

S.L. Corsua said...

slow, slow she likes, as I
she simulates


Ooh, there's steam on my screen. *grin*

puerile and jejune

Impressive word-choice, dear. Loved the way they the syllables rolled onto my tongue as I read this piece out loud. ^_^

che sara sara said...

sublte n sensous

shyloh's poetry said...

very very nice. Great job! Ummm

Devilish Angel said...

Well written...

Innocent Bullet said...

Wow! This is brilliant Vinod. You just leave me spellbound everytime. :-)

Well, what you read at my blog is something that happens across the globe every minute. We bear the cross of living in a shockingly shameful world. There is another variant of that poem and also my response to much discussion that poem engendered at another writers' forum. Perhaps you'd like to read it.

May we all scale greater heights with our words as pegs this year! :-)

Cheers

Dan

rebel_on_loose said...

'Awesome' is all i can say !

Φ said...

Demi
*bows* thanks :)...
Senthil u doubt it??

Vidhu hahahah... :)

ash *humbled* thanks much

Soulless It feels so good to have you around. Your presence smells poetry :)..am glad you enjoyed reading it.

Sophia Thanks a bunch dear one

Shyloh *bows* :) glad you came over..

Vanathi Thanks many..

Dan Dan thanks many for your nice words :) *humbled*..very well said May we all scale greater heights with our words as pegs this year! :-) cheers to you to Dan.. :)

Rebel_on_loose Thanks my friend :)

Blue Athena said...

I so liked reading this V! And as Soulless says, really cool word-choice. :)

Anonymous said...

brilliant...as always :)

: M : said...

you awful man, laughing at my post...