Silhouette of a
lone leaping antelope
across the moon
between the banks
of pine trees
In an empyrean
realm twixt liquid
reflections of a glowing
orb and silver
dusted skies
lone leaping antelope
across the moon
between the banks
of pine trees
In an empyrean
realm twixt liquid
reflections of a glowing
orb and silver
dusted skies
Neither a night's dream
Nor a thought stream,
But a fantasy ridden scape
I stand before and stare into
as we speak
Fate wills, I live a different world
of plastic smiles and spastic reality
outside my penance,
away from your eyes
Something..I seldom wish.. to seek.
Nor a thought stream,
But a fantasy ridden scape
I stand before and stare into
as we speak
Fate wills, I live a different world
of plastic smiles and spastic reality
outside my penance,
away from your eyes
Something..I seldom wish.. to seek.
23 comments:
My..My ..too gud
Fate wills, I live a different world
of plastic smiles and spastic reality
outside my penance,
away from your eyes
Something..I seldom wish.. to seek.
so friggin true...gud wrk
and your penance is what you seek then? will set you free?
once i wrote
Fluorescent smile
That is superimposed
That frozen blush
Sepulchered....
and the lines that caught vidhu caught me too
---"truth" but is awesome...mebbe coz of ur words
arch angel is posted
heart-tugging :(
each time is better than the last. wonderful. will come back again to re-read this ...
outside my penance,
away from your eyes....
provoking thoughts and i accept prerona's comment that each time is better than the last.
gud work.
pardon my duh-ness, I'm still trying to make sense of the first two stanzas... :D....hey you know what If I read 1 and 3 and then 2 and 4 it kinda brings a new perspective to it.
Very nice. Especially,
"Fate wills, I live a different world
of plastic smiles and spastic reality
outside my penance,
away from your eyes
Something..I seldom wish.. to seek."
Yeah, who would seek to stay away from their beloved's eyes! :)
The last para is the best...though i like the first para for your imagination...
Fate wills, I live a different world
of plastic smiles and spastic reality
outside my penance,
away from your eyes
Something..I seldom wish.. to seek.****So true...
Loved reading all ur write-ups, specially MUTE BOAT.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, though silence is the best manner I would choose to honour this poem. Very well written. I liked the following line the most:
Fate wills, I live a different world
of plastic smiles and spastic reality
you've been tagged-like it or not-watch my blog for the next post..its time you lighten up the shadows a bit :)
Wow... Good poem...
beautiful!
...and thus wills Fate!
Simply loved it!:)))
That was a nice piece of poetry :)
Nice one! Would also be nice if u tell us wat inspired u to write the last stanza.
Loved the fantasy aspect of this piece. The first two stanzas paint such a magical scene. ^_^
WOW!
SM one with the same blog title
hey nice pics on flicjkr
Everybody Thank you and love you all so much.. :)
Fate wills,
we undergo a penance
Away from their eyes
and our own
Oftentimes i tell myself
that sins are not what we commit
But committted by aliens on the prowl
and we punish for it,unnecessarily,
our own pristine soul...
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